@RM
thoughts? i like it
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@AvoidDeath
You got fucking cooked by RM. That was great wordplay. usually me and RM rival each other with raps, but he just thanos snapped your legacy
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@Vader
I lazily wrote back a response in like 5 minutes. I'm working on an ultra comeback right now.
@dudz
I didn't understand most of the puns but you definitely made an 'error' with your ending.
If you honestly want feedback I will show you the error:
Page one of my autobiography is Supa tradition of expeditionSorry to pull out geography but that's what I'm good at, and this the Supa rendition
The bolded and underlined part is a severe slow-down of a snowball. If you had led somewhere very pun-heavy with the geography stuff and made it truly epic you'd have pulled off a good as fuck bar because until the 'geography' it was very good.
I could try to write it like this but note that we flow very differently, I like it very liquid but not necessarily even throughout, so there's no pausing in my flow but it can get jittery, where you like it even in general but broken at times due to the rigid structure.
Let's see...
My autobiography would be a blessed rendition of Supa's tradition of wild expeditions,
I'm sorry for the complex geography, it aint simple addition, if you can't keep up with this precision then quit the competition.
@RM
I see what the problem is and your response to fix it is better, but I think it is a bit lengthy
My autobiography would be a blessed rendition of Supa's tradition of wild expeditions,
I'm sorry for the complex geography but if you can't keep up with this precision then quit the competition.
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@Vader
im on my dic ah
oh I like to take pics ooh,
feel that rub,
It's in my 100k tub.
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@AvoidDeath
I am not a lIl pump fan so this does not assume me
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@Vader
pussy bitch
pussy shit
pussy snitch
pussy lick
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@AvoidDeath
fuck you hoe
suck my toe
big fat hoe
such an emo
lick my dick
you eff-in homo
i am so sick
bitches on this dick
i got money
she my honey
fuck yo money
yo verse punny
big ass there
i did the dare
look at my glare
fuck that bitch like a bitch
i am so rich
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@Vader
Your girl's a hoe,
She gives me a blow,
job, and she's on my dick,
she makes it stick,
You're so bad
it's sad,
ayy, yeah
Beat to Loop: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X1QqoxkukUs
I wonder what it's like, to not even give a damn for the hype one builds over time on a sham website,
Come debate, say what you like, then learn to not do that the next night,
Watch what you say, all the views you convey don't need to be true 'long as you persuade 'shutu 'n' 'nar you're A-O-K,
Logical fallacies are cool, if your opponent pisses them off more with the way they word their case; just sit back, relax 'n' pray,
You can be torn apart at the seams by a genius Mars-advocating big-brain and it all won't matter 's'long as they hate way it's displayed,
He can think of every path the colonisation could possibly be justified and bye bye, go away, if one Round's forfeited vs billbatard, Trent will come and vote the vict'ry away, ole ole,
Just roll with the punches, let 'em beat you to your knees; on the floor you'll stay. Waiting with patience for the day ancient aliens repay you for your Pagan ways.
The Punchline Rap
I feel fucking green and so mean like Hulk transforming into beast
Not no boy like Teen Titan but I'm fighting like an action figure at least
Got more models than Playboy, Heffner couldn't pop them bottles and go hardcore
Use the magic like I'm Star, tragic but I saw your defeat from afar like a shot of an M4
Venomous justice just causes ruckus on buses like in Nova Scotia
Where Ricky, he balled on and shined as bright as a light speed Supernova
Sorry to go Missy on em, but she did Andrew filthy and I condemn
Broke up the bros, fucking hoes needa choke like Mahomes in primetime, not again
Spine breaks cause your flattened while I sip on rose wine and shake like tectonic plates
Stop feeling BoJack, you made a fucking rack from that track that was made as a mistake
Don't throw shade like a tree, be humble like an old couple moving slow on a sunny day
I wish I could out and play, I should go out and save the day and brave the dangers I say
Strangers don't bother my things, father give blessings like a corrupted youth, that's truth
Brother's sinned, he's ruined from Fortnite and flying kites with girls it hurts he doesn't go to church, he refuse
Grooving like Just Dance, she want to get into my pants like ants on the grass
Flaunt that like Francine on lean and wild teen with mild anxiety, dump out that stash
Puns work much better as metaphors as opposed to similes.
Pun-heavy Beat to Loop: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-OmZLKUHtgc
Can't trick ya ma ~ Kendrick Lamar phonetic pun
When we talk puns, we say 'heavy' for intense,
Like when the smell makes your head feel squeezed from the incense,
Type of shit to make you wish you could give up sensing the stench for a sixth sense,
This that skilled rap; thick-walled impenetrable defence, type of fort to guard my women, squirting moats, for when my semen is dispensed,
White knights cucked for this dad-of-a-prince; aura royal and immense,
When I say bow down, I mean be humble, no pretence,
Can't trick ya ma in the past, stealing ten cents, can't trick this Tsar, gimp, in the present tense.
11 days later
FUCK IT
34 days later
A diss on some dude on Discord that people wanted me to make
It's a clown from around town trying to act tough banning people down to the ground like a sheriff
Spitting bluff, getting hated by dedicated g's knowing that your a pathetic bluff
Hundred fifty thousands views yet the community wants you bruised and bloody
To a Curious melody about your abuse of power, such a sour mentality
Distorted reality, haunted tragedy of the egotistic prick tryna be slick
Too hype to stay down, to nice to hate now, but you a fake little prick making me sick
Height not a strong suit, bite is some nibbles, sing along to the pistol bars going public
I'm saying fuck it, bars making your stomache ache cause banning was a massive mistake
Pleading the fifth, feeding the hungry like Curry fresh served, bottom rail on top snake
Feelings like Drake, experience demos of a diss that you missed the bar, gymnastics
Try and you'll cry, you're riding high for too long, shoot you down like a bird, pure habits
Lightning and brightening and turning the tides while you switching sides for clout
There wasn't a doubt, servers a desert, no effort I'm expert at knowing this drought
235 days later
bumpity bumpity bump
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@Crocodile
yo yo yo, you're big poo
so bro fuck you
you're piss is the color of poo too
which means you're probably sick choo choo
drink more water and you won't be rue
or else you'll be dying in the loo!
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@WaterPhoenix
bruh square up!
I am the best
I have no stress
Waterphoenix is bad
I am rad
Eveyrone sucks except for me
I am the best, you are number 3.
ooh my flow is so good
no one can surpass it,
I am so good
and i am so very lit.
Everyone is bad
I am rad
Waterphoenix is bad
I am rad
WORD.
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@Crocodile
WORD.
i am so good
i am so good
i am so good
y'all are not good.
WORD
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@Vader
@WaterPhoenix
@Crocodile
Oh I thought it was a rickroll lol. Nice beat
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@BearMan
Yes, I can.
We're no strangers to loveYou know the rules and so do IA full commitment's what I'm thinking ofYou wouldn't get this from any other guyI just wanna tell you how I'm feelingGotta make you understandNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youWe've known each other for so longYour heart's been aching but you're too shy to say itInside we both know what's been going onWe know the game and we're gonna play itAnd if you ask me how I'm feelingDon't tell me you're too blind to seeNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give, never gonna give(Give you up)(Ooh) Never gonna give, never gonna give(Give you up)We've known each other for so longYour heart's been aching but you're too shy to say itInside we both know what's been going onWe know the game and we're gonna play itI just wanna tell you how I'm feelingGotta make you understandNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt youNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cry
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@Intelligence_06
lol ok.
1096 days later
I hate my mother fucking life like a mother fucker
so I put that mother fucking lean in my cup and suffer
all my reasons that I live are as of yet undiscovered
so I spread your booty cheeks like peanut butter, fluffer nutter
so I put that mother fucking lean in my cup and suffer
all my reasons that I live are as of yet undiscovered
so I spread your booty cheeks like peanut butter, fluffer nutter