want feedback on a poem

I wrote a poem a long time ago. Any feedback is appreciated.

A Medieval Tale

Huh... I'll give you one thing, it does something to swap roles there, and I can definitely get behind that. I also appreciated some of the imagery and apt detailing. Maybe some more symbolization would be nice? Though the hairpin part was a pretty good example of that. The overall flow of the poem could have been better, but overall I enjoyed it.

I like that it tells a story, and that it's neat, neat in 'form I mean, easy to read. Though neat as in cool too, I suppose.

Though I know such exists from older times, and I'm sure exists in modern times, the idea's been interesting to me before, of an epic poem.

A 'really long one I mean, to the extent of a hundred+ pager book.

I like the story, and I agree with theweakeredge that switching the traditional roles helped. It kept it from being too cliche. However, the rhyme scheme is simply nonexistent. Sometimes it rhymes, sometimes it doesn't. When is does rhyme, there's no pattern to which lines rhyme. So that could use some work. Still, I enjoyed it.

difficult read as poetry as I am expecting meter,  but its lacking, making it poetry-structured prose, but there is a distinction.

also, there's occasional hint of rhyme, but it's inconsistent, like the middle lines of stanzas three and four, and the first and third lines of stanza four.

It is the consistency of meter that distinguishes poetry, even if it does not rhyme. You have other examples of rhyming, but it seems accidental rather than intended. The greater problem is there are occasional examples of meter, but that also appears accidental, or at least not intended.

Poetry is a more difficult effort in order to achieve the meter that prose can have, but is not necessary.

Seems to be written in the same syllable count and general formatting as a haiku. The climax of the battle was a little underwhelming. The narrative shift was smooth, but the rhyme scheme wasn't consistent so it didn't flow very mellifluously. However, the twist at the end wasn't bad.

6.2/10

Thank you for sharing your poetry

How can you swap the roles when the Hero is by definition meant to be in the role of the one doing the rescuing?

RMM

Gender roles my dude, gender roles

Usually, the knight saves the damsel, rather than the damsel saving the knight. I have no issues with either format, but the knight saving the damsel is so common it's cliche and harder to make interesting. But just give Hollywood 20 more years to make more female empowerment movies so both formats will be equally cliche. (Not that I have a problem with heroines. I just think it would be better for the pendulum to be close to the middle rather than swinging to the opposite extreme.)

Also, what theweakeredge said.

Doesn't it say hero and not knight? 

Regardless the main heroine is a female, that is true, so I wonder why he refers to her essentially as the sidekick to the hero though.

Very Tolkien.

Some might say Tolkien to the point of plagiarism.

It does say hero. I understood it in the sense that it was a known hero in the land rather than the hero of the poem.